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Post by MTRuth on Jan 24, 2013 17:41:31 GMT
I think it sounds good too. I agree with Zed in regards to "encouragement" line. Her suggestion for changing it is good. I have found that as you go along on your path, that many times it helps to go back and look again at what you have written. Your goals or direction might change and it's good to update what you are saying about yourself.
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Post by Shepherdess on Jan 24, 2013 18:09:59 GMT
Jane, I like your statement too and I agree with zed about changing the family and friends it sounds to me like you are reluctant and don't have confidence in what you do. do you have a link to the felt site?
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Post by Karen on Jan 24, 2013 20:12:32 GMT
Thats sounds really good Jane. I agree with zed on that one small change though, it'll make it perfect
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Post by janekiwi on Jan 26, 2013 9:30:29 GMT
Thank you very much Zed (there is no blushing Smilie but I am, there is an embarassed one but it looked a bit sad and your nice complements made smile, and blush) I think that is a much better wording you have suggested. And thank you all for you encouraging comments. This is a link felt.co.nz/shop/janekiwi any advice on photos, descriptions, or anything would be very welcome.
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Post by Shepherdess on Jan 27, 2013 1:25:21 GMT
The broaches seem very nice, your bead work is very good and the patchwork harts are sweet. I find the pictures a bit cluttered. The very first broach pictures doesn't show it very well. You need to use your best shot as your main picture to pull people in. In the multiple pictures there seem to be 2 different broaches( not the picture of the back) so I am not sure which one is for sale. The angled pictures don't really show off the broaches very well. In the descriptions it should sound like you are just talking about the broach the customer is looking at. some sound like you are talking about a group. Its hard to say the same thing several different ways. I sound so negative but I think you have done very well. I have nothing in my etsy shop.
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Post by MTRuth on Jan 27, 2013 2:02:48 GMT
I think the photos need to be simplified, showing only the item for sale. A neutral background would help. I liked your statements telling people different ways they could use the product. Your items are wonderful, with just a little tweaking, I think your sales might improve.
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Post by janekiwi on Jan 27, 2013 7:52:56 GMT
Thanks Ann and Ruth, great advice, I know the photos are a bit muddled. And yes I had added the felted brooches as a group so put a blanket statement, so will take that advice on board. I am not so good at writing, so writing an individual statement for each piece, oh my good grief! It would be good if i could sell some more of what I make, but I lack the gumption to get out there and sell it.
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Post by zed on Jan 27, 2013 8:50:43 GMT
I like the way you show them 'in use' to show how they look different on different backgrounds and with something for scale, but a couple could be simplified a bit- only show the actual brooch you are selling. Starting off the descriptions the same is ok for the wirework ones--your explanation of how they got the name--you can add individual info after ie. This piece is made using blah blah blah... to illustrate what makes them different and unique. It really is hard trying to write and describe things isn't it?
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